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Black Betty at Lone Star Stories

My story, 'Black Betty', is now live on Lone Star Stories. Fiction from Forrest Aguirre, Claude Lalumiere, and poetry from Pam McNew, Marcie Lynn Tentchoff, and Mikal Trimm are also there, so if you don't like me, you might like them.

What inspired me, originally, about this story, was a form that I saw used by the Japanese author Ryunosuke Akutagawa, in a piece called 'In A Bamboo Grove'. In it, Akutagawa uses a series of different narrators to talk about the murder of a woman, each of them with a conflicting version of what has happened. The story was adapted, years ago, by Akira Kurosawa for the film Rashomon, which is, actually, a title that Akutagawa used for a different story, and one that I think is a little more successful in its emotions at the end than the previous. It's also a lot more straight forward, however, and where's the fun in that? Anyhow: what interested me was the use of that broken up narrative device, and the different voices I could use, and the dramatic tension I could get out of what is, essentially, a series of monologues.

I wrote the story at the start of the year and, ten months later, I still like the way it came out, which is not always true for me. But, it's not like my opinion is worth anything on these matters. Go read it and tell me what you think.

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elenuial
Oct. 2nd, 2007 04:08 am (UTC)
I was inspired by the same source material for a play I'm working on right now. Same technique, very different subject matter. It continually fascinates me.
benpeek
Oct. 2nd, 2007 04:13 am (UTC)
it's a neat technique, i find, but one of those things you can't do too often (and there are some good examples of it being used at much larger ranges, too).

akutagawa was a good writer, as well, i've found, though i've only ead the book collection from him, which i think i will have to change, shortly.
bluetyson
Oct. 3rd, 2007 03:10 am (UTC)
Pretty good, really.
benpeek
Oct. 3rd, 2007 03:38 am (UTC)
:)

see i got four out of five for it, too.
bluetyson
Oct. 3rd, 2007 03:47 am (UTC)
Yeah, good end bumped it up a bit, for me.
benpeek
Oct. 3rd, 2007 04:04 am (UTC)
the end is what brings it all together, really.
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